Kirby Writing Competition: Most Effort Award
- enquiry87834
- Apr 26, 2023
- 3 min read
Kirby and The Forgotten Island
By Octavia Leung (Y3, PLK CYK)
Chapter 1: Kirby got thrown into the “Forgotten Island”
It was a marvellous and peaceful day, Kirby was enjoying the sun in the garden. As he was wandering around, accidentally he stepped on a trap and fell in!
“Hahaha!” A familiar voice rang. As the voice got closer, Kirby realised it was the mischievous King Dedede’s trap! Oh! No! No! No!
“Kirby is finally trapped. Oh yeah! My favourite dinner! Mhmm, I already felt the taste of you. Okay, now let’s take the prisoner away!” exclaimed King Dedede.
King Dedede was so happy that he forgot to tie Kirby up. Luckily, his cute little fluffy little Waddle Dees held tight onto him so Kirby couldn’t escape.
“Oh no! Oh no!” Kirby thought. “I should have been more careful. I need to figure out a plan!” Kirby was extremely angry and accidentally hit the cute little Waddle Dees. He immediately felt sorry and apologised but it was of no use, the Waddle Dees were so angry that they coughed out replicas that punched Kirby in the face.
Even though Kirby begged for kindness, it was too late. Threatening to pick him up later to cook him, the Waddle Dees knocked him out.
Chapter 2: Kirby met the Waddle Bees
When Kirby finally woke up, he found himself at an unfamiliar place.
“Hey! Wake up!” Some unfamiliar Waddle Dees shook him.
“Who are you? Are you the Waddle Dees?”Kirby asked in fear.
“How dare you! We’re the Waddle Bees!” One particularly small creature yelled back, Kirby can barely see him.
“We’re good people from Candy Land! That’s why we’re locked here!” Another one explained. “I am Waddle Wee! The leader of the Waddle Bees here.”
“I am Kirby,” Kirby introduced himself. “Where am I? What is this place?”
“This is the Forgotten Island”, Waddle Wee answered. “We have been trapped here since our last battle with King Dedede. We have not seen the sun for three years!” Another Waddle Dee shouted.
“This place is locked by a curse. The only way to get out is by getting the magic potion in the Deadly Forest.” Waddle Wee pointed to a forest, “For years, we have tried getting through the forest, but a monster, named Voldemort, lives there. He is a devil and also a part of King Dedede’s evil plan of eating everyone locked in here.”
“Including me?” Kirby wondered.
“I mean, you look the tastiest,” said the small Waddle Bee.
“Noooooooooooooo! I don’t want my life to end!” Kirby yelled in disbelief. “I still have to eat my batteries in the fridge!”
“We need your help Kirby,” said Waddle Wee as he took Kirby’s hand.
Chapter 3: Kirby went into the Deadly Forest and fought Voldemort
Kirby went into the Deadly Forest. It was very dark and scary, but Kirby mustered up the courage, he must win Lord Voldemort in order to get the potion and free the poor, innocent Waddle Bees.
After a search, Kirby finally found Voldemort, who was guarding the potion. Kirby copied himself so the replica could distract Voldemort, while the real Kirby could take away the potion. Kirby silently said “Action!” and fake “Kirby” went in and distracted Voldemort.
The moment fake “Kirby” went, real Kirby quietly ran over, and sneakily found the potion.
After Kibry took the potion, the replica Kirby evaporated.
It was a success!
“Yay!” Kirby celebrated and rejoined the Waddle Bees. “WE CAN FINALLY GET OUT OF FORGOTTEN LAND!” The Waddle Bees lifted up Kirby and kept chanting, “KIRBY! KIRBY! Our biggest hero! KIRBY! ……”
Finally, Kirby got the magic potion! Kirby poured the potion on the locked gates of the Forgotten Island and finally escaped!
“Hooray!” shouted all the Waddle Bees. “Thank you! We are finally saved!” Waddle Wee cried as he held onto Kirby’s hand.
When King Dedede finally found out, he said “Uhhhh! I need REVENGE!!!!”
Kirby asked the Waddle Bees, “Do you want to go back to Candy Land with me?”
“Oh yes, of course!”said Waddle Wee, “We can’t wait to go home.”
“I need to go back to Dream Land to stop King Dedede’s next evil plan. So I am only visiting for three days.” Kirby said.
“Of course! Why not communicate through our powers so we can stop his evil plan together when you get back?” suggested Waddle Wee.
Kirby agreed.
At last, all the Waddle Bees took Kirby's emergency spaceship back. They lived happily and never got towed in Forgotten Island ever again.
I'm surprised and honoured that you have put in the effort to write this story with three chapters! I'm glad to see you varying sentence structures and attempting to use more descriptive phrases and sentences. I see how you have tried to use more specific verbs other than "said". It's lovely to use the mirror version idea and super interesting to add Voldemort into the mix. Overall, a very pleasant surprise! - Miss Janice